We spent hours walking from one hospital wing to another, lost souls, waiting and gazing at artworks by school children from all over the country. I remembered, with guilt, throwing away my son’s similar 'artworks' in the previous house move. My son, whose tender skin was being deliberately sliced, whose spine was being deliberately exposed. These kids' artworks on the hospital's walls were a bitter reminder that some of my own child's 'moments in time' were languishing into the earth. Wasn't there a blank wall in this hospital, anywhere, where I could stare blankly, no thoughts, no guilt, nothing?
This was my entry into a recent 100 word writing competition. Although I don't know if I will hear from the organisers, I would like to share it with you. Whenever I write, and as therapeutic and thrilling writing is to me, I remind myself that it is the opinion of the reader that matters most. After all you chose to take the time to read my work. I appreciate any questions or comments as it is your feedback that improves my writing .
12 comments:
I think your writing is wonderful Mervat. I am only a layperson, but I am one who is easily bored, and indifferent to fools. Your blog excites my intellect, and you have my admiration and respect for the way you display intelligence and wisdom.
Have a Wonderful Easter Yourself!
Love, Nataliexx♥
I love the way you write, and that is so powerful for such a small amount of words. Good luck with it. x
Wonderful Easter wishes!
compelling!!!!
I don't think the blank wall would have helped since in a situation like that, the guilt is on overdrive no matter what the eyes are viewing or the ears are hearing.
This post almost scares me but very much entices me as well.
~Mary
A very clear image comes through with your words. I hope your piece is accepted.
Darla
Wonderful entry for a 100 word writing competition! You conveyed so much emotion and power in such a short writing piece. It speaks right to the heart of the reader.
I felt so drawn to it.
Yes it made me feel.
Excellent SO excellent.
This is a touching moment every one of us has experienced in some way, wanting to be the "perfect" mother,never, ever missing a moment in a child's life. You caught that moment beautifully, crisp and clear and laden with the guilt and remorse represented by the blank wall. Very telling imagery!
WEll done.
Natalie: Thank you so much for your kind comments. You are very sweet. Have a wonderful Easter long weekend. xxoo
notSupermum: You have truly paid me a wonderful compliment and your words are music to my ears! Thank you xo
Printemps: And a wonderful Easter to you too my dear.
Christina Lee: Thank you so much!
FrankandMary: You have touched on something I sort of knew and felt but was too scared to admit. You are so insightful. Truly thank you.
Darla: If that piece was clear then I was only hoping and dreaming it would be. Thank you so much for your positive words my friend.xo
septembermom: Thank you so much. your words mean so much and give me the confidence to keep writing. xo
Sarah Lulu: You are too kind. Thank you so much xo
lakeviewer: You are so right. I really appreciate your words. They mean so much to me. xo
Again thank you all. Regardless of whether I win or not I have already achieved what every writer could hope to achieve and that is your encouraging response. This is such a wonderful thing and which will make me a better writer.
I must agree, you are an exceptional writer, Mervat, and I look forward to reading more of your words.
Suko: Thank you very much. I love to write. You are so kind.
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